the image of "blood draining into the soil, tree roots seeking out the blood, drinking it, and the leaves above rustling with new life" and then tying that in at the end "She wants to know if her father is in the bark of the hemlocks, in the clamoring branches of the dogwoods, or in the sighing pines." Just perfect...
Beautiful imagery in this post. It's subtle writing that touches the heart, especially if one has lost someone dear.
My favorite sentences were:
"Give me a kissy" (a child's memory) and "they never knew my father" (regret).
Enjoyed reading your short fiction, J.M. Thanks Bryan for hosting your short fiction Thursdays, I'm starting to look forward to these enticing bits of literature.
Thanks so much Bryan for posting this on your blog. It's so satisfying when another writer appreciates what you've written, so you made my day! :)
Thanks Jen C., jbchicoine, Marlene, and DGH for your generous comments. Some of the words you used to describe my writing surprised me, and so you all made my day as well! The very best for you and your writing!
I love the idea of the father watching her as part of the world. How it connects her to him is so very sweet. Thanks for sharing. Very much enjoyed it.
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I tried calling him and texting him to tell him I miss him and still love him. I asked him to give us another chance. He slowly stopped replying to my messages and stopped picking up my calls.
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Beautiful...sensitive writing.
the image of "blood draining into the soil, tree roots seeking out the blood, drinking it, and the leaves above rustling with new life" and then tying that in at the end "She wants to know if her father is in the bark of the hemlocks, in the clamoring branches of the dogwoods, or in the sighing pines." Just perfect...
Thank you so much for sharing (and for posting Bryan). It is absolutely beautifully written.. well done.
Beautiful imagery in this post. It's subtle writing that touches the heart, especially if one has lost someone dear.
My favorite sentences were:
"Give me a kissy" (a child's memory) and "they never knew my father" (regret).
Enjoyed reading your short fiction, J.M. Thanks Bryan for hosting your short fiction Thursdays, I'm starting to look forward to these enticing bits of literature.
Thanks so much Bryan for posting this on your blog. It's so satisfying when another writer appreciates what you've written, so you made my day! :)
Thanks Jen C., jbchicoine, Marlene, and DGH for your generous comments. Some of the words you used to describe my writing surprised me, and so you all made my day as well! The very best for you and your writing!
Just beautiful. So emotional and tender. Thank you for sharing. :)
Thanks so much, Susan!
I remember reading the draft of this on Janice's blog. It's even more awesome now, but this is till my favorite line:
I imagined their blood draining into the soil, tree roots seeking out the blood, drinking it, and the leaves above rustling with new life.
Thanks Matthew! Yes, I wanted to keep that line from the beginning. Thanks for stopping by and checking out the finished piece. :)
great writing. vibrant. engaging.
I love the idea of the father watching her as part of the world. How it connects her to him is so very sweet. Thanks for sharing. Very much enjoyed it.
Just a couple of months ago, I gave this relationship doctor Robinson buckler a try. It was my last hope to get my ex husband back.
Weeks before my ex left me and our 2 children, there were a lot of argument and fighting between me and him. On the day he left me, he told me that he doesn't think he loved me any more and this was not working. I was so devastated hearing this, I begged him not to go and I even promised that I would change. But he made up his mind already. He packed his bags and left our house.
I tried calling him and texting him to tell him I miss him and still love him. I asked him to give us another chance. He slowly stopped replying to my messages and stopped picking up my calls.
I then searched the internet on how to get ex back, and even bought a few products such as text your ex back and ex recovery system. Nothing worked, and my ex was still very cold towards me.
When I was about to give up, I found Robinson buckler ex back program. He is a relationship coach with a lot of success stories. I knew what I needed was not a book but a coach to guide me how to make my ex fall in love with me again. I immediately signed up for his program.
In the first couple of days, I made a lot of good progress. I am happier and more confident. My ex saw the positive changes in me, and started to talk to me more and even asked me out for dates.
Fast forward two weeks later, my ex told me that he wants to give our relationship a second try. I was beyond happy when I heard that.
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