tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post5709084140420403032..comments2024-03-29T00:39:54.374-04:00Comments on The Alchemy of Writing: Tears Like Ethanediol - The World in MiniatureBryan Russellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09555071335245492790noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-92088655295697867932011-02-01T12:59:51.861-05:002011-02-01T12:59:51.861-05:00This was so vivid and dark. I love it. Your writin...This was so vivid and dark. I love it. Your writing is beautiful even for such a chilling account. Great job. I'm headed to the dictionary also. Looks like you've stumped us.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08798243128846248604noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-73623929300647623912011-01-29T15:21:34.533-05:002011-01-29T15:21:34.533-05:00Very powerful.Very powerful.Southpawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16539290964546504171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-52467533061901001732011-01-28T23:53:36.126-05:002011-01-28T23:53:36.126-05:00This was almost poetic. It has a rhythm that pull...This was almost poetic. It has a rhythm that pulls the reader in. Breaths a life of its own. Not angsty at all, but still breathtakingly painful.<br /><br />.......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-58800381874311270892011-01-28T14:18:58.081-05:002011-01-28T14:18:58.081-05:00Wow, so very poetic. One of those pieces of fictio...Wow, so very poetic. One of those pieces of fiction that should be read out loud. So lyrical and beautiful. But so tragic and sad, too! Well done, Jessica!Carolina M. Valdez Schneiderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11589934533051907801noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-19834114196891144692011-01-28T13:57:43.267-05:002011-01-28T13:57:43.267-05:00Beautifully written. Dark and edgy. Left you guess...Beautifully written. Dark and edgy. Left you guessing to the end.<br />Nancy<br /><a href="http://nrwilliams.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">N. R. Williams, fantasy author</a>N. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-28999590621031387022011-01-28T11:41:30.090-05:002011-01-28T11:41:30.090-05:00Every time I read this, I get more out of it. Bea...Every time I read this, I get more out of it. Beautiful and haunting on so many levels. Bryan, thanks for promoting Jessica and her creative talent!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01899768909313326172noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-30878644170271727232011-01-27T19:09:39.848-05:002011-01-27T19:09:39.848-05:00very nice--rhythmic and poetic. Did you say it was...very nice--rhythmic and poetic. Did you say it was originally a song? I can see that. Good stuff~ :o) <3LTMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05239077455322030275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-40115971483127751632011-01-27T16:49:17.585-05:002011-01-27T16:49:17.585-05:00Poetic indeed. Powerful imagery.Poetic indeed. Powerful imagery.M Paxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14096697282530998519noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-44110425815965357862011-01-27T15:07:52.907-05:002011-01-27T15:07:52.907-05:00I'm just coming back by to say that seeing Jes...I'm just coming back by to say that seeing Jessica and Bryan working together is like hops and yeast. I LOVE IT!<br /><br />Okay, you're not actually working together, but you know what I mean.Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-34171393845334734382011-01-27T14:56:29.277-05:002011-01-27T14:56:29.277-05:00That was amazing. Beautifully written and melodic...That was amazing. Beautifully written and melodically done.M.A. Lesliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00345656231366226417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-45474755361291523472011-01-27T14:47:42.566-05:002011-01-27T14:47:42.566-05:00Thanks so much, everyone. I really appreciate you ...Thanks so much, everyone. I really appreciate you all taking the time to read!Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-23716521246945319942011-01-27T14:43:57.183-05:002011-01-27T14:43:57.183-05:00I can see how other people could see it become mol...I can see how other people could see it become molded into a poem. But the piece works for me the way it is. It feels poetic, yet never loses the power of prose. Do what you, the author, will, but either way this piece packs a punch. Excellent work!Jeff Beeslerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17935580053176710609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-59945535187867304402011-01-27T13:29:22.349-05:002011-01-27T13:29:22.349-05:00very nice. full of creepy imagery just hanging of...very nice. full of creepy imagery just hanging off each phrase. Unsettling fun.Okiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01393689307300304035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-73810218204009189972011-01-27T13:22:19.085-05:002011-01-27T13:22:19.085-05:00Well written full of haunting imagery. Well done, ...Well written full of haunting imagery. Well done, Jess.Kelly Polarkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10968381456100611120noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-16424159197482123502011-01-27T13:00:03.877-05:002011-01-27T13:00:03.877-05:00This had a lyrical feel when I first read it, yet ...This had a lyrical feel when I first read it, yet I didn't even catch the rhymes until I saw Matthew's comment. Such a well-crafted piece!<br /><br />Make 'em sing, Jessica. Make 'em sing.Nate Wilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09690171790664252309noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-88212929935753340622011-01-27T11:54:42.530-05:002011-01-27T11:54:42.530-05:00I liked the haunting images that were reinforced b...I liked the haunting images that were reinforced by the repeated rhyme sounds. Nice! :)Jhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18157787498219886339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-72641854085858149442011-01-27T11:20:04.317-05:002011-01-27T11:20:04.317-05:00Wow!Wow!Karen Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01522178275164058849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-10762384785223687172011-01-27T11:14:20.033-05:002011-01-27T11:14:20.033-05:00Nice job, Jessica. Loving your usage of sensory d...Nice job, Jessica. Loving your usage of sensory details, as well as your pacing. And like Matt, I also looked up ethanediol. Haha!Paul Josephhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07219724579550337686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-2213513696784228292011-01-27T10:02:56.112-05:002011-01-27T10:02:56.112-05:00The visual imagery is breath-taking and evocative....The visual imagery is breath-taking and evocative. The ending haunting. I like this very much. RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-1183744364909035252011-01-27T09:53:58.483-05:002011-01-27T09:53:58.483-05:00I've read this before somewhere. I love it. Ha...I've read this before somewhere. I love it. Haunting.Candylandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08956196611348299424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-22294609842271602012011-01-27T09:38:41.315-05:002011-01-27T09:38:41.315-05:00A wonderful crafted piece. Full of emotion. I enjo...A wonderful crafted piece. Full of emotion. I enjoyed reading, thanks for sharing.Glynis Peters https://www.blogger.com/profile/01175378917872403609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-19379847388102312842011-01-27T09:14:05.138-05:002011-01-27T09:14:05.138-05:00I actually wrote it as an expansion of a poem. And...I actually wrote it as an expansion of a poem. And I have tried making it into a longer prose poem too. I experimented with lots of different forms. But I don't want to leave too many different mixes out there. Right now, I'm sticking with it as a part of my novel, without all the rhyming. But, yeah, it's progressed A LOT from the original poem here. Thanks so much, Matt! Loved you little rhyme ;o)Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-47570031619181201372011-01-27T09:10:07.450-05:002011-01-27T09:10:07.450-05:00I would like to see this formatted into poem. I me...I would like to see this formatted into poem. I mean it works either way, and it's certainly beautiful writing for a haunting tale, but the rhythm was so strong, and the rhyming/not rhyming so awesome that it felt like a song, almost (see what I did there)?<br /><br />And I had to look up ethanediol, but now I get it.<br /><br />And yes Jess, I do recognize where this is from, but it's even more fun as flash fiction, you can get away with so much more when it just a single, disjointed scene, don't you think?<br /><br />And thanks B!Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5423907132654588993.post-13203814986288508522011-01-27T09:06:29.878-05:002011-01-27T09:06:29.878-05:00Thanks so much for posting, Bryan! :o)Thanks so much for posting, Bryan! :o)Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.com